Outline Of Free Hugs

By : I Putu Yogi Agustia Pratama

Topic sentence       : A free hug is like hugs from other people.

                                 (maybe you can add some word which can show the specific aspect or to make it more interesting. Example: A free hug is hug from other people which makes us share our love and happiness.)

Major supporting sentence 1    :  We see where a man who looks like crazy carrying banners that read free hugs.

Minor supporting sentence (1) : -  First, a man looks crazy with the banners that run in a city, but that man to do invite all people to campaign for free hugs.

                                                    (maybe you need to make this sentence simpler and please try to put a full stop or period.)

-  Where the presence of free hugs we could feel the love in the arms of each other and also get a sense of togetherness.

(I think you don’t need to put this sentence because it’s not really support the major sentence.)

Major supporting sentence 2    :  Then, there is the old women who first embraced that man, out of which began to arise to bright light and the people began to think to do free hugs.

Minor supporting sentence (2)  : -  From grandmother's arms is clearly visible affection given radiance so that it can attract one by one people to participate do free hugs.

-  Then, everyone hugged each other and to make each other happy         ambience in the city.

  (I don't really understand what do you mean by this sentence. I mean the word "make each other happy ambience in the city". I think there was something wrong with it.

Major supporting sentence 3    :  When many people have embraced each other and bring the paper that said free hugs, there are several policemen who dismiss their activities and ban the people hugging.

Minor supporting sentence (3)  : -  But it doesn’t to make those people to stop hugging and doesn’t make the first man to give up free hugs to everyone.

                                                   (It better is the sentence, "But, it doesn't make those people to stop hugging and doesn't make the first man give up doing free hugs to everyone.")

Major supporting sentence 4    :  Then, the man signatures request to everyone who participated in the       activities of free hugs.

Minor supporting sentence (4)  : -  The man get 10,000 signatures from the people and able to convince the police would mean that hug and assure that the hug is a sense of compassion for the people who loved like their own family.

                                                      (maybe you have to separate it into some sentences.)

Major supporting sentence 5    :  Finally, the police agree with the free hugs campaign and the officers also huge each other with all of people.

Minor supporting sentence (5)  : -  In the end everyone was hugging each other.

Concluding sentence   :   We can start to hug each other people, because the arms of a love for each other
                                      and will also lead to a sense of family with each other.